I love this. I think I should give you 11/12 or maybe 12/12 for your excellent paragraph ;) This includes everything Mr.Michael ask for. I think you did use some everyday word but that's alright. Not too much though.
Your paragraph seems to flow very well ~ This is also for my favorite moment in Cat Tien too xD
But I don't know why but it sometimes when I'm reading it, it's a little confusing. Conclusion? I think the conclusion is really funny :D I'm easy going so... I will give you 5/6 for now ;D
I think your paragraph has so much emotions and one more thing,write about true thing,Aeris!!! I was there,too!!! Also, you did not use a lot of words examples like interesting or fascinating... I will give you 11/12. I really liked your paragraph and it is perfect.
I love this. I think I should give you 11/12 or maybe 12/12 for your excellent paragraph ;) This includes everything Mr.Michael ask for. I think you did use some everyday word but that's alright. Not too much though.
ReplyDeleteYour paragraph seems to flow very well ~ This is also for my favorite moment in Cat Tien too xD
ReplyDeleteBut I don't know why but it sometimes when I'm reading it, it's a little confusing. Conclusion?
I think the conclusion is really funny :D
I'm easy going so... I will give you 5/6 for now ;D
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ReplyDeleteI think your paragraph has so much emotions and one more thing,write about true thing,Aeris!!! I was there,too!!! Also, you did not use a lot of words examples like interesting or fascinating... I will give you 11/12. I really liked your paragraph and it is perfect.
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